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    dots Submission Name: PURPLE FEELINGSdots
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    Author: Ligeia83
    ASL Info:    23/f/the literary world
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 17/14/13
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 626
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 743



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    dotsPURPLE FEELINGSdots
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    Just one thing-
    And then I'll go...
    Just once-
    And then no more-
    Do not speak
    It's not your words I need-
    Something else-
    Want it- want it- want it-
    Just once
    Your body against mine
    Just once
    Your purple feelings against mine
    Black-sad-black-sad
    No More
    Just once
    and then I'll go...
    It's not your love I want
    Don't need it-Don't need it-Don't need it
    Not your Soul
    But your body
    Is what I truly want-
    I want your purple feelings-
    Just once-
    And then I'll go...
    For Ever-

    Do not need to worry about me...





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      wow!
    this passion poem is different from others, so much to dig into, and i know there is depth.
    you are a wise head the colour purple is for fertility and the language of colours.
    is this poem is about wanting a child, if not i am sorry i just gussed it since you don't want anything else also this is what purple denotes.
    i liked the enery and flow of the poem, you have good writting skills. for first times i saw repeated use of something so beautifuly. i loved the words 'just once'.
    i also liked the way you said the final good bye.


    bye
    nishant
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      I used to think that poetry was just the result of a songwriter being too lazy, or musically inept to put melody to their words...but this makes me realize how wrong that was...In reality, poetry is a writer inspired enough to make the words SING. And with this, you did just that. Everything was sing-song and melodic, and fluid...just beautiful. I like the usage of the color purple to describe emotion..its a nice change to see it instead of the generic blacks, blues, reds...the repitition is nice in this piece...it really adds an extra....for lack of better term....."umph"....anyhow, great write...looking forward to checking out more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]


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