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Mirror Image


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
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Words: 57
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I still like this one. It describes me a lot. I look into the mirror every day and see something ugly.
But I'm slowly coming to relaize that looks aren't everything. It's just hard sometimes, because when you don't feel good about yourself, you aren't motivated to focus on anything else...


Mirror Image



She looks into the mirror
saddened by what she sees

she knows the mirror never lies
that what she sees is true

she fills up with anger
it's hard for her to look

she sees all her flaws
and everything else

but what she doesn't see
is that she is beautiful




Submitted on 2006-06-20 18:38:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Unless you grew up with wolves, you would have heard these statements, "What's the matter with you? Why can't you do anything right? It's all your fault! You're a loser! ..." and all that.
And chances are you would have concluded along the way that you were flawed and imperfect and didn't have the right to live or something.
Of course you concluded that! What else can you possibly think of?
But most people don't realise, that their flaws are what make them perfect. What make them unique. Just like everyone else ><.
So the next time you see someone in the mirror, do smile, and acknowledge that that person can do one thing that nobody else can do as well.
Be themselves.
That is true beauty.
Cheers and thanks for a good read.
Azuire
| Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
  Piper.. I haven't commented your stuff in a while, so here I am.

She looks into the mirror
saddened by what she sees
---
Very simple and direct... But I think you could easily slip in some imagery here to amplify the power of the emotion. Remember, mirrors have to do with light, and a bakcwards reality. Also, your eyes can always lie to you because the truth is always shrouded.

she knows the mirror never lies
that what she sees is true
---
This is a very flawed logical conclusion, adding all the more to the plight of the situation and the empathy of the emotion. She's clearly lying to herself, because she trust this inanimate object more than herself - which, mind you, could be fishing for a lack of self-esteem. This, I think, is what hold your poem up, these two lines. Without this loophole, none of your poem would really mean anything; so I think you should really aim high in this stanza... Let your imagination flow out... Why does it never lie? What caused her lack of trust in herself? Is there something beyond the surface facets?

she fills up with anger
it's hard for her to look
---
Your character doesn't want to face the reality she's making. This is an emotion we all know too well as children, seeking to run away from our nightmares - but one must always realize that we created them in the first place. I didn't really like your use of 'fills up'... It gave me the impression that she was an empty void of emotions, which isn't true... She's fragile, afraid...

she sees all her flaws
and everything else
---
An interesting few ideas came to my mind after I read this stanza, almost perfectly tying them together. "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder." "Your friends are a reflection of who you really are as a person." The only problem is the empirical flaw of the whole; she is only SEEING her flaws in this 'mirror'.

but what she doesn't see
is that she is beautiful
---
I don't know if you thought this would be the punch line for this poem, but I think these last two verses really tethered the possibilities of meanings that this poem could've held. It really just rbings out the shallow nature of humanity, throwing away the possibility of masking her truths with lies. Again, imagery would so make this last stanza powerful! She can't see, so she's blind... Right? you could play on 'What's blinding her?' & 'is it her will to be blind to her beauties..?'

Anyhow... Overall, I think this piece was simple, without really accessing to the beauty of simplicity. It was just simple. I'm sorry if you think I'm being hard... but it's how I see things...

Outlaw-ed
P.S: How are you?
| Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  I felt the emotion in this, even as short as it was. And I agree, this could be built upon. I do have one little piece of advice, The mirror, it does lie. For you see, you explain it all in the last line :
"but what she doesn't see
is that she is beautiful"

Our self image gets so screwed up, that we see what our warped mind shows us. It is up to us to changed this image of ourselfs, if only to see the real us staring back through the glass.

Again, great emotional writing, keep it up. (writing I think is the best therapy :P )

Take care,
Michelle
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by Fey | [ Reply to This ]
  I wrote a poem called 'Image in the Mirror' quite a while ago. It too adresses this issue.
I like how simple it is. It is also very clear, which could be a good thing or a bad thing. It reminds me of modern art in the sense that it's complicated because it's so simple (like looking at a picture of a big red dot, and you're like "I don't get it")
see ya later
The Conqueror
| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the emotional content here. It is sad that most people get caught up in their imperfections and never give theirself a chacne to see the beauty they posses.
Saddness fills me. Never have I had this problem, at least not for very long. I am one of a few that is comfortable with my imperfections.
I think we are all unique adn this makes us special. I love me and I hope that you love you. Noone can see what lies inside unless you show it to them. If they don't want to see, then it is their loss.
I hope this wasn't about you. You seem to be a very aware young lady.
Beautiful write. Thanks for sharing.
Keith
| Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by Man in Black | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one. I wish it would have rhymed, or had some kind of rythme though. This is how I feel. I hate to look into the mirror because I know that I won't be happy with the person staring back at me. I hate how there is an "image" that is implanted in everyone's mind, and if you don't look like it they don't even think to look twice at you. Well this was good, and I added it to my favorites. And I can't wait to check out some more of you work!!!
~Alyssa~
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  its sad..i took a emotional inteligence course once...it explained that the majority of the time when we look at our selves we do not see the whole picture and its only through what others see that we obtain the whole truth..though your poem portrays this backwards..you see all your flaws but are unable to see your perfections....that..in its sadness is a good thing..you will be more humble in this way of thinking..very good expression of this...just need to find someone who will see your beauty, and it will all be ok..your poem though could have used some exagerated expressions more leaned towards your aspect of seeing your flaws..maybe naming a few..telling us what it is you see...would like to see this re written but longer..good job
| Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by fallenone | [ Reply to This ]


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