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    dots Submission Name: a song to rememberdots
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    Author: shootingstar
    ASL Info:    22/f/hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 102/120/21
    Words: 486
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 1318
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    Description:
       this was written for a friend. this is not my work but the work of a friend and he wrote it to be read so i thought i'd put it up here


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    dotsa song to rememberdots
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    This song, goes out
    To everybody who knows best
    What its like, to forget the happy ending
    Because youre so caught up, in tragic stories

    This song, goes out
    To the ones who lived in the moment
    Right up to their last breath
    Never wasting a day
    Never wasting away

    18 years is way too young
    To disappear forever
    I said to myself as i wrote these words down
    When all you have is a moment
    Take it and hold on
    Because you might not get to say goodbye (goodbye)

    When there are no more second chances
    The clocks run out
    But its too many years too soon
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    Now my worlds turned upside down
    My smile turns to a frown
    Its a chain reaction
    How could it happen? (happen)

    The fatal crash
    The death of a friend
    And by the time i finally realize
    The tears slowly fill up my eyes
    Its not for me to decide
    Who deserves to live and to die
    But if i could have i wouldve saved him
    If i could i would have....

    When there are no more second chances
    The clocks run out
    But its too many years too soon
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    now my worlds turned upside down
    My smile turns to a frown
    Its a chain reaction
    How could it happen? (happen)
    x2

    Spoken:

    sometimes i wonder if Gods just teaching us a lesson when a life
    is taken away, and sometimes i wonder why life is the price we must pay,
    all the sorrow that comes from tragedy, all the pain from loss, all the
    suffering caused by the fact that there was no second chance for those
    that actually deserved it, the ones who couldve done great things but
    instead were cut down in the prime of life, to become just a saddened
    memory in the hearts of those that were touched by that person, is that
    justice? I dont think so. what is the point when no lesson is learned
    and people get hurt, and happiness is replaced with sorrow and
    depression, is that justice? i dont think so....

    Whens theres no more second chances
    The clocks run out
    But its too many years too soon
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    How did it happen? (how did it happen?)
    Now my worlds turned upside down
    My smile turns to a frown
    Its a chain reaction
    How could it happen? (happen)

    Spoken:

    carry the memory with you in your heart always
    dont let them become just another faded picture on the wall
    live for the moment.....

    (dedicated to shane koch, who deserved a second chance)
    written by steve maiocchi




    Submitted on 2006-06-20 19:35:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aiyo this was some deep s hit. Gets you thinking about whats going on in life.. Its hard when somebody dies young, as I have lost a few, in my arms on the streets.. I really enjoyed the spoken part of this piece.. Really touching


    Tell your friend he did a great job
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Solemnpen; tell your friend that this write is fantastic. And I'll add it to my favs, just to let you know I like this.

    This is indeed a song to remember.
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]


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