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    dots Submission Name: you left me heredots
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    Author: meandmyshadow2
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 5/11/13
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       denny you son of a bitch


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    dotsyou left me heredots
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    you left me here
    i know you thought i would fall apart
    so did i
    forgot who i was
    and how i can survive
    you werent the first to bring me to my knees
    but somehow i forgot that
    the inner strength that has got me this far
    masks the pain again
    raising two kids on my own
    never needed you to make it
    but foolishly believed in love
    what a joke
    i wish that i had just slept with you that night
    when i was vulnerable
    and needing solace
    how i hate you now
    always getting your answering machine
    but knowing you are there
    i want you to know
    that your distance has made me stronger
    you think i would fall apart without you
    you were wrong you son of a bitch
    i will never let my guard down again
    you will end up alone
    and i will still be a survivor
    when youcall
    you will not find me waiting


    believing in

    you and not myself ever again




    Submitted on 2006-06-21 02:18:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the beginning of it when you talked about "you weren't the first to bring me to my knees". That takes some kind of something to acknowledge that. But from the words of this piece I can sense that you are strong and it takes some backbone to raise 2 kids by yourself.. I know you are just loning for that someone, but better things come to those who wait.

    I liked the last part also, telling him you aint gonna believe in him again.... That's some real s hit right there

    Keep going at it strong
    Solemn
    AKA Cade
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      the hated defiance of peoples own selfish desires brings so many tears...i hate to suggest the majority of the time that people write their poems about their lives but this poem seems so sureal that i have to say that i am sorry...men are ignorant fools..they rip and shred their ways through hearts and take what they wish..though the sad thing in this same aspect is the fact that there are some men who actualy do care but because of self reflections from so many events that burn scars into our minds these men go unnoticed...it is why i can say that i sometimes look down when seeing a woman...great poem great reflection
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by fallenone | [ Reply to This ]


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