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    dots Submission Name: Been a long time comingdots

    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       Yo, it's been a long time coming and short time to get there.. I've been in some things that I couldn't control. Some real street shit. Been changed, don't know if it was for the good. THIS IS A WARNING TO ANYBODY WHO WANTS TO PLAY AROUND LYRICALLY.

    Big shout out to my people: Unknown soldier, Aknahlij, Brack, and munchie

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    dotsBeen a long time comingdots

    Been a long time coming,
    It happens like that
    When you canít stop cuming
    Thatís what happens when you surronded by hoes
    Money and fame, you forget your roots,
    thats how the story goes

    I remember back when nahlij was hating
    Supressing the lyrical thoughts, my motivation
    Now he shows respect, Iím riding beside my nigga
    Our rhymes together, Elite skills devastation

    Caught up in some shit on the streets
    more real than any internet beef
    Silver bracelets clanking together
    Finding it harder to withstand the weather
    What you putting down on paper
    multiplies ten times
    As your name gets put in the paper
    I thought I was living it then,
    but now itís living in me
    3 months, sentenced 4 times, bitch fight me

    Walking these streets begging for beef, like a pit
    Looking for the next vic, like 50 hanging on Emís tit
    If you looking to pic up the mic,
    you better be serious
    If you pick up the pen,
    my words will make you delirous. fucking period

    Aknhalij jumpstarted this monster,
    now I canít control it
    He inspired me to pick up the pen,
    now Iíve done been in the juvie state pen
    Gone upscale to the club, the night life,
    that these other bitches dream of
    While fondeling theyself looking
    at they mamas tits on Sunday night
    Pay homage to my dawgs,
    who I came up with, as my pen grew
    I still canít believe these bitches
    think that DYR is through

    Unknown repping shit to the fullest,
    putting out lyrics making other rappers jealous
    Wait, bitch, I advise you to proceed with caution, Donít get overzealous
    You gonna end up on the 10 oíclock news,
    giving the papers a story to sell
    Imma end up in my favorite cell, itching to get out
    Just another fucking story to tell

    Submitted on 2006-06-21 02:27:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ahhh...cade. i can't believe u went to juvie. i bet ur ass was fighting again. u always did have that bad ass temper. thanx for the shout out man. it's good to see that some of us still rep DYR while we can. i remember when u first joined elite. yeah....me and Nahlij were hating on u and [censored]. and ragging on u cuz u used the word "nigga". but times change and u were allowed into the circle and now it wouldn't be complete without u. ill [censored]
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      My only problem with this is do you have to use the word nigga.The history of this word is terribly sad and a blight on humanity.I understand rapping comes with a certain language but unless you are a respected rapper or negro yourself could you try to find a better way to express yourself.It comes across as if you are using it for shock value and, because you can.Using this must be relevant.Also Ten o'clock news jars a bit and distracts from the run maybe: Your gonna end up on the late night news I hope u really aren't this angry keep happy.

    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by going_strong | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...dot dot dot. They are some down right harsh lyrics you got there. I'd say for a rapping son of a gun, you are pretty good, of course I have no experience in that, but hey...I suppose I like the diction that makes the reader feel like he's reading this straight from your mind or hearing it as it's being rapped, you know. If only there was some music playing with this...

    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]

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