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    dots Submission Name: its 6 A.M. and i cant get any further than this...dots

    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       yep its short. amazing i know. i never write short stuff but this one seems compoete how it is.

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    dotsits 6 A.M. and i cant get any further than this...dots

    its in pieces all over the floor,
    and i cant put the pieces back together,
    now my body has become an empty moor,
    and it seems ill never get better....

    Submitted on 2006-06-21 06:09:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Try to keep a clear head, it always works out better that way...but what you have is very interesting...

    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been writing off and on for years, and I've become a great fan of minimalism. In reality, less is more...it leaves more room for interpretation, it leaves spaces for questioning, and forces the readers to use their rusty imaginations....that said...don't sweat the writers's block...because out of it you've produced a very nice, though simple and short, read. But...when I have writers block, I just write whatever I'm thinking. For example...."The sun sets and....I'd really like a taco, Did I turn the stove off? And the children laugh in the incoming twilight...Crap! My precalc assignment is due!" It seems kind of silly, since its a silly example...but I eventually come across a good idea that I can run with... Good write, and Good luck
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      Trust me, this is a FREAKIN AWESOME begining! Here's some ways to help... I think. Its gonna get hard if you're not going back to this soon.

    1) As you write, describe whatever there is clinging onto you at that moment. Like, feelings, life happenings, encounters, moods, etc. The main question is 'What happened?'...

    2)If you can't put your finger on your work, forget about it for a period of time. When you come back to read it, think for a first impression, think of how did the writer(obviously 'you' but don't think about that.) had probably felt then, and continue from there.

    I hope that helps. (>.<)
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]
      Sorry meant to say bye I,m a learner on this site.

    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by going_strong | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't stress the words will come.U will find in your writting life U will have many words ,fragments and bits of writing everywhere.We are not perfect creatures and no first draft should be the final product 'till we are satisfied. R we ever though?Maybe try to visulise what will become of those pieces of body----on a moor ..... what could happen........what will the journey be for those pieces if they are to become whole?Good luck.

    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by going_strong | [ Reply to This ]

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