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    dots Submission Name: Geese Gatheringdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 247



    Description:
       Got Ssssss..........

    Happy First Day of Summer Elite!


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    dotsGeese Gatheringdots
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    Circle of six
    at Sunset
    silently swimming ~ ~
    soothing sight

    Somehow, suddenly,
    sitting ashore
    serenading
    singing
    so soothing
    simple
    serene
    Sincerely Soulful ~*~




    Submitted on 2006-06-21 14:46:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all, I quite enjoyed the ssssss sounds. It was neat to read aloud, and made me
    And secondly, I loved the nature part about the Geese. I could picture them swimming "in Geese fashion", then suddenly being on shore making their serenadingly serene honking sounds. You expressed it uniquely and enjoyably in this write.
    Great to read you again

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Serene, symbolic, simple, scrumptious.

    I like this.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Great imager...really well written...i'm not a goose fan, but i now have a new appreciation for them...

    -Anya
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh!! It is so nice to see you posting again. I have missed your wonderful nature poems and this one is of course...just lovely! And wow...look at all the "s" words. hee hee! This poem reads very fluently and I didnt feel tongue tied one bit! Just a very nice and soothing nature poem which is what I love about your poems. And the imagery here is wonderful. Such a beautiful picture painted in my mind! Great to have you back! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Sufferin' succotash! Aliteration on the first day after solstice????

    hahaha Jeez it's nice to have some tiff magicback. We all missed you.

    be happy

    graeme
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another almost hypnotizing write from you
    This one brought me instantly to the edge of a lake or of the Ocean as I watch the beautiful Geese become one with the water
    IT truefully is a beautiful vision
    Thank You for creating IT
    God Bless
    Ron
    So how are you doing it has been awhile???
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      very beautiful. i'm back!!! i'll be on more often now that i live with my mom!!! 18 in 3 monthes. how was your holiday. be cool
    pass it
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I think you did a great job with keeping it flowing just right and by using aliteration. I also feel this was a reminder of how much you are creative with your works concerning nature. I enjoyed this very much. Welcome back!

    Trina
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me feel as though I am watching all of this. I like the way its short simple and concise.

    James
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      long time no post i havent done to much either i feel mysel not wanting to write anymore
    this was a little different i got the idea second read through
    as well as the picture came clear to me
    great write
    and hope alls well

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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