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    dots Submission Name: A new type of lovedots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 809
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 957



    Description:
       a man that I have been with for awhile, and the way he expressed his joy when he found out were having a baby and how much we love each other.


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    dotsA new type of lovedots
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    My heart keeps singing,
    To every beat of yours its ringing,
    With just one touch of your hand,
    It's like you understand,
    How I feel inside,
    And when I am to cry,
    your there wiping the tears from my eyes,
    Telling me everything will be alright,
    And not to fright even when the baby arives,
    For I will be there for you day and night,
    I will take care of you both,
    It's a resposiblity I tresure most dear,
    And just remember I will always be here,
    It's my first time to be a dad,
    And the thought of it makes me so glad,
    It's a gift we were both given,
    And our smiles from this joy could not be hiden,
    Just the thought of this,
    Just the thought of you,
    Brings me to know I couldn't handle the thought of losing you,
    For this has opened my eyes to show me,
    How much I really love you.




    Submitted on 2006-06-21 15:33:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Congrats to your first child. Nothing is more heartfelt and joyous than having a baby. I wish you two the best and keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2009-08-27 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi.. thank you so much for your comments on my poems.... I loved the simple raw honesty in this poem.
    | Posted on 2009-08-21 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing is so magic as the first child! Nice poem and a wonderful story!
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      more like a poetical letter what ever that is,,,
    great,, made me think of being too dependent a bit, only my opinion.
    only cause im i lonesome wanderer
    cheers gud luk
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by deadbeat sun | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very well written. It was sweet to, I almost cried tears of joy because the emotion was so strong here. It was like I was living it myself. Great work. Unfortunetly, I've never experienced great joy such as that. Congrats to all you good luck, I hope it keeps running for you. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

    Always,
    Shattered
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]
      I rellay did enjoy it from top to bottom, it kept me glued to the screen, it really flowed well, all the rymes fell in place perfect, a really solid job on this one.
    keep up the good work, and congrats on the expectant arrival.

    J MO
    | Posted on 2006-06-21 00:00:00 | by J MO | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, congratulations on the baby. That's wonderful. I'm not too sure about "And not to fright even when the baby arives." My dictionary says that using fright as a verb is considered archaic, and I think "not be frightened" sounds a little less consciously poetic. You also have a wee typo in "hidden."
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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