i like this poem. the title is perfect; it tells us exactly what we're going to get. it almost seems like there's a missing stanza between the second and third stanzas that would give the poem a more gradual progression. jasmine
The title of this said all. I don't know if I can say that this poem lived up to the intensity of the title. Certainly, the rhymes did not help the poem. I didn't think they were too bad, as some others that I have read are much worse. But the third verse really shows that this write needs to be free verse. I am sorry that I am being harsh, but I believe that is the only way to improve. On the whole, you managed this well but it could definately be improved if it were in free verse.