I am simply caught adrift by the sneering, yet thoughtful tone in this poem. It isn't bashing, but it isn't nice either. And the subtle assertions of who [you] is the best, are quite enjoyable to read! I feel as if I am talking to someone who is confident in their shoes, and enjoys a friendly political banter. This was like a breath of fresh air after all the angst I have been reading. No offense to angst or teen feelings, persay, but it is a bit repetitive. So thanks for this!
Thanks also for the review of 'To See is To Know', which ironically was origionally a somewhat ranting thought, but after Medetation In Dance was bashed for being a paragraph, I looked at this one and said, 'It could use some line structure, too'. And so there we are!
Hah... this made me chuckle. Sarcasm is enjoyable. I usually don't think much of rhyming poems, but I still enjoyed this one a good deal. Just one stanza...
I buy American; I'm sure you do, too. Only the best for my family will do.
that rhyme seems really, really forced. Maybe not even forced, it just sounds... I don't know... too easy? lol Meh, I'm not allowed to critique rhyming poems... I don't really write any, so my opinion is invalid~ So yeah. Good write though!
Lol, I like the sarcastic tone in this... sure, we all have our prejudices but I think most people keep them in check... by keeping silent. But still, that's hypocritical isn't it?
As for an overall assessment? Little nitpicks maybe... like the parentheses around "(me)'-- perhaps you were wanting to italicize it instead? That's what I figured. And... instead of ending on periods in some of your stanzas, how about using semi-colons instead so that it's more uniform? Just some things I thought I'd throw out at you. Oh, I'm not sure about the semi-colon and comma in these two lines: "I buy American; I'm sure you do, too." -- How about -- "I buy American(:) I'm sure you do() too(;) -- I think a colon would work better here as an intro to the second line statement, and then a semi-colon to differentiate the next two lines from these two. Again, just suggestions for you to have a squiz at.
Overall, I love the biting tone in this. It accomplishes so much more than a preachy tone ever would.