Now I can see why Chaz calls you my Wifey
Because weíre always together and you hold me down nicely
Sometimes I piss you off until you may wanna fight me
You may slap or bite me
But through it all you still have to admit that you like me
I never want to hurt you, not even slightly
I joke all the time but I donít take our relationship lightly
When you said you were ready it kinda surprised me
Dead inside, but that night your kisses revived me
I tried to kiss you before and twice you denied me
But our lips touched right before I gave up and put my feelings behind me
When Iím lost I know youíre the one who can find me
But Iím never alone because youíre right here inside me
I may not be your boyfriend as you so often remind me
But your love still sets me free from this solitude that confines me
small yet of course you nailed it, this was strangley excellant because it was so simple, and though you rhymed at the end of each sentence, it never seemed forced, it was always smooth, great job here babe! ;)
get it. Anyways what would be a very detailed comment? iight i got it.
your rhymes was tight the flow was just right and because it was about love it was just cool iight to me at this moment it doesn't need work so don't let others put u down cause hata's do lurk anyways this was a hot rhyme and it came from above oh yea by the way i'm glad your in love
so how was that? lol anyways good job keep doing the things you love.
Bah, improvement my rear. You did very well. I think that as long as your feelings are expressed like you wanted, the write is fine! The rhyming was very well done I think, and the meaning was very clear. I know how you feel. I went through something like that myself. Keep up the good work!