PAPER GIRL by Psyve

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Submission Name: PAPER GIRL dots

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Author:	Psyve
ASL Info:	53/M/ Bahrain
Elite Ratio:	3.29 - 75/102/60
Words:	26

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	1104
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	194

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PAPER GIRL dots

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Paper Girl,
What in the world
Made you think
This boy would drink
Your every word
Like wine?

That was unkind,
Paper Girl…

Submitted on 2006-06-22 11:27:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
My intrigue is peeked. And I would have liked to have read more. :o)
Also, I wonder what would make a boy want to call a girl "paper girl"...
Although short, it made an impression on me. I liked it.

LM
| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by LadyMerlina | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.