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    dots Submission Name: PAPER GIRLdots

    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsPAPER GIRLdots

    Paper Girl,
    What in the world
    Made you think
    This boy would drink
    Your every word
    Like wine?

    That was unkind,
    Paper Girl…

    Submitted on 2006-06-22 11:27:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My intrigue is peeked. And I would have liked to have read more. :o)
    Also, I wonder what would make a boy want to call a girl "paper girl"...
    Although short, it made an impression on me. I liked it.

    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by LadyMerlina | [ Reply to This ]

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