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    dots Submission Name: Living a Liedots
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    Author: _winky_
    ASL Info:    25/f/minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 664/529/96
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsLiving a Liedots
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    I canít believe Iíve lost you
    Just walked out your door
    Nothing seems to be able to stop
    My tears from hitting the floor

    I know itís my fault, living a lie
    I was just to troubled to see
    To stupid to go where I belong
    To busy hiding from me

    For once in my life, I knew love
    I knew the meaning of a best friend
    I was at home where ever we went
    My heart to you I always extend

    But a million pieces later
    I saw what you once were
    When we first fell in love
    Was the you that I prefer

    But every time Iíd leave you
    Iíd break your heart once more
    Just knowing I go back to him
    This, you could no longer ignore

    I need you here next to me
    I promise to belong to only you
    It just takes time to leave behind
    A life I always knew

    Perhaps some day down the road
    Weíll be sitting again side by side
    Bringing me back into life
    Because when you left, I died.






    Submitted on 2006-06-22 13:54:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I guess the first and last stanzas really hit home for me. Anybody that's ever lost..someone that they are so completely in love with...knows the emptiness and the hopelessness that you showed here in this poem. When someone makes you who you are...makes you be who you want to be..and then...they leave...it's just like you said..you lose a part of yourself...something inside of you dies. Whether you find it again with the same person or with someone new...love will take form in your life again...it always does. Great write and so emotional. I loved it. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW.....girl I feel your pain. We never notice how much somebody means to us until we either lose them or they lose us.

    This was impactful. you definitely left me with the emotion that you had when you wrote it. Yet, I have been in and out of that same emotion for the last week, so maybe you just made it flicker a little.

    Love is such a wonderful thing when we have it, when we hold it, and when we appreciate it. When it comes to a point where that love is lost, taken for granted, or just simply drifts away.....we lose part of ourself with it.

    I hope that you keep your head up and know that the most beautiful things in this world don't come as on single entity. Just as a flower...if you see it once....you most likely will somewhere down the road see it again.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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