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    dots Submission Name: Clichedots

    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 874
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1057

       This poem pretty much speaks for itself. It's a bit of a rant but I think it captures what I was feeling at the moment.

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    There are so many things
    about which I'd like to write,
    So many things that fill my mind
    as I sit here tonight.

    I think about the forest floor
    beneath a silver sleepy moon
    and the fireflies that light the skies
    at dusk in early June.

    I think about the beauty
    that I see everyday,
    the common little things,
    like the sunlight on the bay.

    The little things that everyone
    loves to write about,
    every day in every way
    until the tunes played out.

    Tell us something new they cry,
    show us something more.
    We don't care about the past,
    we've heard it all before.

    Should I bottle up my feelings?
    Should I move on to something new?
    Just because I was not first
    to share these things with you?

    I'll stick with what I know
    no matter what you say
    for nothing matters more to me
    than those things you call cliché.

    Submitted on 2006-06-22 15:59:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like! But then again I feel much the same sometimes. Everyone writes about the same things, yet I believe we should continue writing. For God made the sunrise ont he bay and fireflies for all to enjoy, and we all perceve (sp?) them differently.
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey! I like it. I think its good work. I even like the flow. So U go and give us more.
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      There is some good work here, your flow is good, word choice fits the poem very well, overall good read. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by Dark Muse | [ Reply to This ]

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