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    dots Submission Name: Moral from a hillsidedots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 889
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMoral from a hillsidedots
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    Wild rose.
    Growing on hillside green
    Dark as the night, Yearning to be seen.

    Shady flower.
    Breathing mountain air.
    Tilting that head, never hiding the flair.

    Gem of nature.
    Always too proud.
    Rejected the freezing, so cold and so loud.

    Lonely flower
    Realizing the truth.
    Scared of the thunder, picked by a brute.

    Green Hillside.
    No wild rose left to see,
    That one will always be lonely, if one chose to be.




    Submitted on 2006-06-22 17:05:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really awesome poem about nature and it really connects with the reader. I liked the little hint of rhyming in there. Nice touch. Good flow, good everytihng. Keep writing.
    ~CAotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely nature poem with a good moral to boot!

    Your stanzas were all tight and that made it a great read.

    Nice job!
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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