I really enjoyed this poem. I know exactly how it feels as well. I mean, you want to disregard the sadness, and just toss it away so you can be happy. So you put on a fake smile but you are too scared that you wont be able to feel at all. I think I am in that unable to feel part.
My only critique is about the silver bracelets. I kind of dont get what they have to do with the poem at all. Makes me think that you just looked down at your wrist when you were writing, and put silver bracelets in the poem when you saw them on your wrist. Haha.
Never-the-less, I really liked this piece. Good work.
I have only read two of your things, and I'm getting way too tired to keep reading, but I really like both of them, and was suprised upon reading them. I like these alot, and it's rare that I really like alot of things. I have a feeling it's because of the steam of thought writing style, and the "sinful" subjects for lack of a better way of putting it. To me this was a story of trying to lose yourself, and deciding maybe you didn't want to in the first place, but you already have. Now what? You feel like you don't have much, not much to think, and in the words of Isaac Brock, "If you're not thinking at all, I'm not sure why you're alive". Craving lonliness of your thoughts, you know, that whole feeling is what I got from this piece.
I quite liked this. I think this is really meaningful poem, and I really dig the way youíre dealing with your feelings. Iím almost 30 and youíre only 14 but believe me, things donít change that much. Sometimes Iím running out of things worth thinking, but something always comes along... ... when I cannot reach that sunny blue, I manufacture artificial highs.Ē Ė I really liked this. As I said, I like this poem, but it has some rough moments. You could improve your punctuation and capitalization. It is not that I think that is essential for a good poem, but it would make it read better. Stanza 4 is fine just the last two lines I donít like. I think they are way off... Do you really need something so spooky like picking teeth with bones? Any way, Iím glad I stumbled upon this poem.