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    dots Submission Name: Illusions of the HEartdots
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    Author: Sun Spots
    ASL Info:    99/ sex yes please/ HeLL
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 36/70/36
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIllusions of the HEartdots
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    It was only a fantasy
    What he saw, felt and touch
    Was a mere Illusion
    Stuck in his head
    She seem to be
    So unique and special
    In everyway
    But things are not
    What they appear to be
    Sometimes you have to
    Open your eyes and look
    Behind the glass
    Because the world
    Has a false perception
    To those who seek with
    The heart and not the mind
    And eyes




    Submitted on 2006-06-22 21:42:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I liked the simple yet very true observation you made in the last 5 lines of your poem:

    "Because the world
    Has a false perception
    To those who seek with
    The heart and not the mind
    And eyes"


    Well said!

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]


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