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    dots Submission Name: Yesterday.today.tomorrowdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I found a book with some of my old poetry, its kinda shitty. But whatever


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    dotsYesterday.today.tomorrowdots
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    Today you made me smile, that one was real. Today you made me cry, those tears were real. Today you made me laugh, that too was for real. Today you made me bleed, the red was real.

    Tomorrow promises me sunshine.
    Tomorrow promises me pain.
    Tomorrow promises me happiness.
    Tomorrow promises me nothing for tomorrow is just another day.

    Yesterday you made me feel fear. Yesterday you made me hate. Yesterday you made me cry. Yesterday you made me this way.

    I loved you, I love you, I will love you.
    I hated you, I hate you, I will hate you
    Yesterday, today, tomorrow and forever




    Submitted on 2006-06-22 21:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that you had a good idea behind this, but I don't think that you wrote it as good as you could have. I think that maybe if you wrote the either the stanza of tomorrow like the stanza of today and ysterday, or vice versa, then it woul look better. That's just my opinion. Other than that, I think it can be improved if a little more effort is put into it, but I also think that it is fine. It's up to you, your the writer.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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