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    dots Submission Name: I Tried to Make It Truedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsI Tried to Make It Truedots
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    I tried to make it true like a waking lucid dream
    every thought focused on making it a reality,
    bBut we can't control the daylight world
    if fate does not cooperate.
    I crush my insides at the impossibility
    of making you love me.
    If only this world were as simple
    as the one we see with closed eyes.




    Submitted on 2004-05-14 09:29:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I've been there. And I got what I wanted, I got my dream. But by the time I realised it, it wasn't my dream anymore, only his...
    | Posted on 2004-05-18 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish we could make people love us....It seems the unfairest feeling in the world, when one person loves another without reciprocation. What unjustice that Cupid would shoot only one arrow.

    We still have the dreams though...and this, while not enough, is better than nothing at all.
    | Posted on 2004-05-14 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was beautiful!!! i really liekd this it was very deep i lvoethe 1st line the most:

    I tried to make it true like a waking lucid dream

    that line was liek omg amazing great write definatly a favorite!
    | Posted on 2004-05-14 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      enh... I've liked some of your others on the subject better, this one doesn't have enough imagery or metaphor =^..^= ~Cora
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      if only....
    but sometimes when the world inside your head leaks out, it's not part of you anymore and you can't connect to it. has that ever happened to you?
    but this is still an interesting write.
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]


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