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    dots Submission Name: There will always bedots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Again from the journal book thing of mine. looking back I realized how angst I was, still am not as much. I want to sleep.


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    dotsThere will always bedots
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    I'm lying here on the floor, drowning in a pool of my own blood and tears. I know that there will always be one more fall.

    I keep on seeing your face, branded there my memories. There will always be one more puncher wound.

    I lie to myself and attempt to play permadent make believe. But I know there will always be one more cry to be muffled.

    I smile to please those around, even though inside I'm down. I know there will always be one more dream to break.

    I sit in a tub full of my own blood, reminsing. There will always be one more lie.

    I never thought it get so deep and still I sit there and let it bleed. There will always be one more time to live, I hope.




    Submitted on 2006-06-22 21:53:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pessimistic to the core... till that last line and those final two words. As an expression I enjoyed it, and there was no doubt that these were, familiar, emotions unfortunately. I found the repetition of blood to be mildly distracting, and seems to take away from the piece overall. But good job all the same.
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]


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