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    dots Submission Name: Make Things Rightdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 743
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    Description:
       Just narrowing down my life of wrongdoing I guess.


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    dotsMake Things Rightdots
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    In a moment in time,
    I found myself playing with fire,
    Didn't know that I might
    Burn down my whole empire;
    I found myself in a line,
    That had greater desires,
    The other answered the why's
    So I switched while I was at it.

    When It came to be my turn,
    I asked why do I make things wrong?
    Then I felt my soul tickle and burn
    And didn't know why it was taking so long.

    Then a voice emerged from inside,
    And told me "Why even bother?"
    "You were in the right line,"
    "You want what's best for yourself, not what's best for others."

    So the following line read "Make things right,"
    I figured that was all I could do,
    And so after several beams and lights,
    I woke up to a life,
    Of pureness and truths.




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