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    dots Submission Name: ** When You Wish Upon A Stardots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 898
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       just a little something i came up with..thanks to everyone whoz helped me out!

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots** When You Wish Upon A Stardots

    When you wish upon a star,
    Do you wish for the good to start
    Or the bad to stop?
    When you blow out the candles on your Birthday,
    Do you wish to start the future
    Or to fix the past?
    When you toss a penny in a wishing well,
    Do you wonder who you'll be with for the rest of your life,
    Or what you will regret?
    When you wish upon a star,
    Do you wish for the good to start,
    or the bad to stop?

    Submitted on 2006-06-23 15:03:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow never thought of that now im a feel diffrent whe nim gonna blow out my candles on my b-day lol just kidding well anyways good peice of work keep it up!!
    | Posted on 2006-06-25 00:00:00 | by pretty_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good poem , Very simple. It made me think.. I was personally answering each question in my mind. This is very orginal and You don't need to change it in any way.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Sandra Walters | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it, it's easy to read and I like how you repeat the first three lines in the end, makes the poem easier to remember.
    good job
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      What I liked most about this was the simplicity and thought behind it. Your questions were really thought-provoking and the style you used to write this was suitable. I don't remember reading anything like this, so good job on the originality. I have no suggestions for this. Keep it up

    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      good Question
    i wish for unconditional love
    but thanks for bring it up
    simplicity are the best poems
    I love this
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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