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    dots Submission Name: Last Moments Of Life Prt.3dots
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    Author: chaos_flame
    ASL Info:    24/m/ky
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 46/83/26
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLast Moments Of Life Prt.3dots
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    "Scared, Bloody, and forever lost
    To the evil of my holocaust"

    "I have suffered so much torment
    agony, and despair
    and there is so much pain
    that fills the air"

    "Every thing is now motionless
    Like it was on pause
    To think I was capable
    That i was the true cause"

    "If only I hadn't taken that gun
    you would still be breathing
    but now you lie there
    and you wont stop bleeding"

    "I hope you can forgive me
    but i had no choice
    It was him in my thoughts
    and his horrible voice"

    "So goodbye my love
    and know Ill miss you
    but he will not shut up
    until I killed you"

    He took his beloved wife down to the basement. Then, bound her to the floor. He grabbed for the gasoline and began to pour it on the both of them. Then, grab a book of matches.

    "Soon we will be together again!!!"
    echoed like a huge bell
    "God make them stop!!!"
    And now he burns in his own hell

    Aaron Switch died that night
    along with his ex-wife and 3 childern. The ex-wife, Aira Switch, was shot to death 12 times in the head. Then, he poured gasoline all over the both of them and set them on fire. His children, John, Derek, and Craig, were found in the backyard hung from tree in the backyard. Also there was a chow named Fluffy that was decaputated with a running lawmower.
    It seems Aaron was an escape mental patient from the local asylum and thought he could to lucifer. As to the reason he did it, it is unclear. But this videotape is the last moments of Aaron and his family's lives.














    Submitted on 2006-06-23 15:12:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was pretty good-- very entertaining to say the least. The only thing is try to keep everything in the same tense and check for minor mispellings. Other than that nice job!

    ~Jamie
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by AnnaBullen707 | [ Reply to This ]
      It was pretty good-- very entertaining to say the least. The only thing is try to keep everything in the same tense and check for minor mispellings. Other than that nice job!

    ~Jamie
    | Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by AnnaBullen707 | [ Reply to This ]


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