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    dots Submission Name: ** Fallendots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 692
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 305


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    dots** Fallendots

    When I fell off my bike,
    I stuck a band-aid on my knee
    And continued to peddle.
    When I fell off my horse,
    I grabbed on to the reins
    And urged my mount forward.
    When I fell in love,
    I sat there shocked wondering
    How come I can't recover?

    Submitted on 2006-06-24 13:27:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am going to add this to my favourites . I am surprised that some one so new to the world of poetry wrote something so deap and meaningful. This really shows true talent. To get such a message with the help of such few words requires talent, and you managed to do that very well. Excellent work!

    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really love this piece to me it meant. like when you fall and get physcaly hurt then u can just get up and keep on walking, you can fix it help yourself, but when your heart gets broken its not as easy to recover, you feel as though you will never recovre from all the pain. great write i loved it bye!
    ~Love Ashlee
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by OscuraAmor | [ Reply to This ]
      this work is very good its pretty much true about love and recovering from it. great work!! it'll be great if when someone broke our heart alittle neosporin and a band aid would help but sadly it doesnt work that way this peice was very good i loved it!!
    *~D'Ann Ramirez~*
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by pretty_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so true, in life you will get hurt many times and get cured, but for some reason when love hits you, it's like a semi truck ran over you, smashed you on the pavement and you are aware but can't get up.
    love is hard but it does over come all things. i have seen it ....
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Tears of Fear | [ Reply to This ]

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