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Drinking to Forget


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
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Words: 150
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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No, I'm not an alcoholic. Never was and hopefully never will be. I wrote this when I was like fourteen...
It was about someone else of course. Someone who had a hard life and didn't know what else to do besides drinking to make their problems go away.


Drinking to Forget



Her eyes turn red
tears fall down her face
she lifts up the bottles
and lets the warm liquid
flow down her throat
it makes her feel better
as if it were medicine
and she was sick
it lets her forget about her life
so she doesn't have to drown
in her sorrows
or think about how bad
tomorrow will be
she has been waiting so long
to have that feeling again
she doesn't care anymore
about getting help
for she knows the only thing
that can help her
is that bottle in her hands
no one else can take away the pain
like it does for her
no one else can make her forget
about everything
only that liquid
she's pouring down her throat
can do that for her
drinking the pain away
is the only way to get rid of it
or so she thinks




Submitted on 2006-06-24 14:05:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  First I so hope your like not 15 with a drinking problem so I am going to assume this is about someone else....Second this is written extremely well, I really liked the way you showed a soft side to alcoholism, like a vulnerability admist calamity. Third this write is so powerful and on point you must have been close to the person/s going through this situation to pretray them the way you did, there is almost a frogiveness in your voice and with that as the I am convinced to forgive too.

thanxxx for sharing
llcollins

ps...
kudoos
| Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
  Very interesting. Slightly vague I'd say, because this is JUST attacking the addiction; a future plan might be developping a "What the pain is" section of this poem. I really liked the last line, it's like Pandora's Jar: a bunch of bad things, so many that you lose count, come out but at the end a tiny bit of light - hope - come out at the end.

Outlaw
| Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so true and deep
I like how you captured alcoholism and spoke of the dangers of addiction
I have suffered with addiction in the past for five long years with a crystal Meth addiction
I am happy to say Yesterday was my one year sober anniversary And I have never felt better
If you need someone to talk to Im always here just pm me
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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