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    dots Submission Name: Still?dots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStill?dots
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    They say still waters run deep.

    Who are they?
    And what do they know
    anyway?
    The guy that never shuts up-
    he's hiding something.
    That babbling brook of a cheerleader?
    Now she's got issues

    And poets can't write
    with tied hands;
    And dead artists don't paint.
    Storytellers talk in their sleep,
    letting their cats and skeltons out

    But still waters have nothing left
    ... to say




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      who are "they"
    and why are they always "saying"?

    does what they say
    really mean anything?

    still waters run deep
    and only speak
    when someone is really listening

    someone like a poet who finds
    muses in the deep, deep sea

    I agree, the world is noisy
    for no apparent reason!

    sweet write, as you can see I'm inspired by your musings!
    thanks so much for sharing,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the chaoticness of this piece...

    im torn over the questioning at the start...
    while they are valid questions i dont know... they seem to kinda bunny hop like learning to drive lol

    i like the way you point out who "they" are though...
    you ever seen the movie conspiracy theory with mel gibson in it? and hes talking all crazy like about "they" and "them" and when asked who "they" are he says "no one knows who "they" are... if we knew then "they" would have messed up" LOL
    and well... in this case "they" are all those pretty lil perfect ones at school who seem to have everything going for them and all though really... we still dont KNOW who "they" are...

    i like the next stanza... about poets and artists and writers... i dunno... i guess its going along the whole misunderstood vein though which is getting close to cliché in my world... but that could be just me...

    my only thing is... i cannot quite tie all your ideas together...
    still waters... problem people... artists... speechless waters...
    im sure they do connect somehow for me though coz i like the way this piece leaves me but logically i cannot find it...

    anyways yup...
    them waters may not having nothing to say but it sounds like you do so keep writing and saying your thing...
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      
    "They say still waters run deep.

    Who are they?
    And what do they know
    anyway?
    The guy that never shuts up-
    he's hiding something.
    That babbling brook of a cheerleader?
    Now she's got issues

    And poets can't write
    with tied hands;
    And dead artists don't paint.
    Storytellers talk in their sleep,
    letting their cats and skeltons out

    But still waters have nothing left
    ... to say"

    Perhaps you're confusing 'still' with 'dead' as you make your feelings known (which leads me to question the backstory of this post). Silence is not emptiness; in some cases it's the lull between writes, the gathering of energies that settles into words. The question posed is a fair one and deserving of an answer. Loud people have little of substance to share with anyone and those who carefully weigh their responses usually write works such as this.

    Nicely done.
    Take care of yourself.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      To me, this poem is all over the place. You get a nice flow going and then abandon it...and then you start over and do the same thing again. Work to make this more crisp and clear as to what you want the reader to get out of it. Good write though...i'll check out some more of your stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by norm | [ Reply to This ]
      I am stagnant among "the still waters" of "nothing left...to say," so this hits home with precision. I love it like it is, no changes.

    "dead artists don't paint" - great.
    "storytellers talk in their sleep" - fabulous.

    Just loved those two lines. A definite FAV.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2006-06-24 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]


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