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    dots Submission Name: Letter of Love and Caredots
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    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Just a little short sweet something


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    dotsLetter of Love and Caredots
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    Dear Intrasigent

    Living hopelessly
    can you really decide
    to choose that?

    Angry, hungry.
    Is that what you
    really wish?

    Raved, caged.
    Is that what
    you really envisioned?

    Loveless, soulless,
    alone, nearly dead.
    Beyond pained.

    Your heartís grown
    cold, beating, yet
    shattering.

    Quivering with thoughts,
    regrets, bleeding with
    faux.

    Are you lost?
    Afraid?
    Shamed?

    You donít have to
    decide solitude.
    Punishment. Forever.

    You can be forgiven.




    Submitted on 2006-06-24 21:34:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really love your writing style on both of your poems. You express such a freedom in the way your words flow.
    You did a great job on selecting your title, it completes this poem. Great Job.
    Love and Peace,
    lynn
    | Posted on 2006-06-25 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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