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give me the beat

Author: unknown soldier
ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
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Words: 263
Class/Type: Lyrics /Serious
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another write, another day. comment

give me the beat

Spinning dreams
That’s all I have as I drown the screams
Of the obscene beings who live their lives on the screen
Our lives being demeaned as spectators play the scenes
That show that life isn’t just how it seems
Bringing a different thesis with facts
Trying to prove to the world that Jesus was black
All these half time believers are whack
But I’m one of them
So I guess I’m just a deceiver on tracks
Guns cause death
You can’t conceive us with Macs
Other emcees are only worried about receiving them plaques
With cash bundles and stacks
It’s all good in the hood if you hustle and bone hoes
Cuz you be selling em crack
All I need is a mic
All you have is your tats and a gat
All of your respect is an act
Slicing my own wrists
If that’s what it takes to make you bastards react
Time for war so shall I defend or attack?
I’m a martyr
Soul evacuated, my body leaves in a sack
Bullets go through my chest and leave through my back
Laying on my face drowning in blood
Schemes of revenge, no longer crying like doves
Resurrecting again
This rap shit isn’t a trend
The messages I send
Are supposed to lift up the women and men
And slaughter the friends who are always plotting your ends
Trust has become obsolete as I battle through conceit and deceit
Blueprints are out, planning for these traitor’s defeat
All I need is a mic, somebody give me a beat

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  One of those raps that I can actually appreciate. If all rap was like this I would rethink my choice of music. Great job.
| Posted on 2006-06-25 00:00:00 | by tokillthedead | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice! I think your rhyming was good. Your flow was good, but not as as good as I know you can make it. The wording was very effective. I felt you were not as hard hitting as you normally are, but still you did good.

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really good! the best i think ive read of urs in awhile! but i could really u noe apprepciate this and i cant spell dammit! u didnt lose me i understood it which is suprising ok! on to da next one bye!
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  u a fag real [censored]
| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
  i disagree i think it flowed perfectly from beginning to have a powerful messege....honestly im not a rap person...but with verses like yours i could be....

| Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  iight iight let me find out lol. This was hot all the way through. It kept me hanging on every word and all i know was it was tight. Idk it had a deeper meaning than what was on the outside, you have the talent of doing that so keep it up.

| Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
  hey bubz, this was kool, u only get better!, flow was tight and consistant, lot of thoughts were touched here, i liked it!
keep em cummin
| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  Yo dre drop the verse.. jus kiddin but seriously i really liked it in the beggining but you sorta lost me in the middle to the end.
| Posted on 2006-06-25 00:00:00 | by oblivious | [ Reply to This ]
  awwww, I thought this was so sweet. How when you had said, "The messages I send
Are supposed to lift up the women and men"
I unserstand this, you have meaning in your raps, it's more than a ryhme. Unlike the other rappers out there only trying to get money and just for what? for bragging abuot stupid [censored]. I love this alot, I'm still waiting for the day that you be recognized, and when you said, "All I need is a mic, somebody give me a beat". The beginning was different from the end, but it all went smooth anyhow.

Keep it up babe!

| Posted on 2006-06-25 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]

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