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    dots Submission Name: Forever & Todaydots
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    Author: BleedingTears
    ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418/289/62
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 801
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 524



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       i was REALLY mad when i was at my sister's.


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    dotsForever & Todaydots
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    Lying my way through agony.

    Living my life through tragedy.

    Becoming a part of anarchy.

    Our lives are falling apart.

    The only thing to survive,

    Our lost souls; surrender.

    This is who we are.

    This is what we've become.

    And this is how we'll stay.

    This is what it's been forever.

    This is how it is today.

    Forever we are this way, including today.




    Submitted on 2006-06-25 22:07:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you can do better on this one
    i think it was good
    but it could be better

    <3 lelian
    | Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Lelian Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      ... i dont know what the others are saying about anarchy and how the government should just 'go down' but i really enjoyed your statement about how things in life wont change and we need to submit ourselves to being able to understand each other. thats what it was for me at least. A very thoughtful and powerful piece.

    -nate
    | Posted on 2006-12-31 00:00:00 | by forevermountain | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally don't see this as a politically directed poem... it sounds to ME more like somebody saying that us teenagers... many of us... are becoming anarchists; we're going out on our own to do as we please, and it seems like whoever this is written to doesn't understand that that's how things are now, and that's how things are going to be.

    That's just what I got out of it, though.

    I read one of your poems, and personally love the way you write, so I just had to read more. Seriously, keep writing! You're really good at and I plan on reading more of your works.

    ~ Stygian
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Stygian | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece....bush is a piece of crap and i agree with toxic rayne, the government needs to go down. this piece really shows good emotion and is quite personal, i like it. keep up the good work.


    xoxoxoxo <3,
    billy
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      I like! I'm a bit of an anarchist myself...the government needs to go down, well, at least some parts of it, you know? Anyway, I liked this because it shows your anger, yet hides it at the same time, almost like you bottle things up inside. That's just my guess, but I could be so very wrong. Keep writing, you have a very nice talent.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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