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    dots Submission Name: Sour Rosedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSour Rosedots
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    My writings pointless I canít get through to you.
    To think I had a chance I was such a fool.
    Your heart I could not capture.
    My words have no magic rapture.
    Crimson tears are liquefying.
    My lonesome heart you are crucifying.
    Cracked and leaking is our loving cup.
    The love in my hand begins to breakup.
    I can only watch as it disappears without a trace.
    And this one sided love I canít wash from my face.
    Love in you I could not create.
    Heart tested I no longer believe in fate.
    Iíll be here forever because of the poetry I weave.
    And you can only look down as you leave.
    You were my nightingale.
    But I guess even itís voice can fail.
    In my heart every time I saw you I brought a flower.
    I ignored the fact that real roses always sour.




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