My My Paramour Paramour
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My My Paramour Paramour
high rollers... broken doters... on sidewalks walk their mistresses... willing lovers. from pawn to pawn... to hand to hand... on and on... and on and on... on chariot board which horde the poppy of which the dragon bleeds it's jelly it's fire breath makes people happy when happiness fleets their viability my, my, paramour, paramour, pillows have rarely heard such resplendent lore... to speak to others whom hate their lovers and come to you and hurt you and hurt you... and all the world against you, against you... dawned on me a congruent desire inside my ghost which released itself unto yours so fiercely retortless unbound by conscious cessations fallible truths we kindered new spirits before they were ashen ones and buried our lives... and spat on them! and spat on them! and spat on them! |
Submitted on 2006-06-26 06:35:06 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Wow! I love the originality of your writing. especialy the repetitions like "and on and on and on and on and on and on and on'' "and hurt you, and hurt you" - definately doesn't hurt You, ha ha "against you against you" "and spat on them and spat on them and spat on them" Extremely, breathtakingly original I hate myself for not thnking of doing that in one of my poems. You must be a genius. I admire you, I admire you, I admire you. Oops, looks like I'm starting to bite your style you Mozart of words you. I can't believe nobody has ever thought of a style like this. They should teach this in high school English classes across the world, and it should be labeled the Mr. Mundane technique Magnifacent! Bravo! Bravo! | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ] | Wow! I love the originality of your writing. especialy the repetitions like | "and on and on and on and on and on and on and on'' "and hurt you, and hurt you" - definately doesn't hurt You, ha ha "against you against you" "and spat on them and spat on them and spat on them" Extremely, breathtakingly original I hate myself for not thnking of doing that in one of my poems. You must be a genius. I admire you, I admire you, I admire you. Oops, looks like I'm starting to bite your style you Mozart of words you. I can't believe nobody has ever thought of a style like this. They should teach this in high school English classes across the world, and it should be labeled the Mr. Mundane technique Magnifacent! Bravo! Bravo! | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ] | Ok I liked the first stanza. The repetitive wording works well too. I am not sure though what this poem is about. Paramour is a lover right? So were you hurt by a lover? Did you hurt a lover. was one of your lovers hurt by another person? I think your message is unclear. However, the old world style is classic and I love when people write about love that transends the ages, and chariots and dragons. It is nice to know that out there, romantics like me still exist. | | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ] | when l read your poem., echos are felt..seems somewhat lovely too... | | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ] | |
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