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    dots Submission Name: Our Friendshipdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 614
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 471



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    dotsOur Friendshipdots
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    One day my life took a sudden turn
    I met her and I'll never be the same
    Now we're unseperable
    Dreading everytime we part
    And loving everytime we meet
    We're just friends
    But it seems like we're sisters
    Like I've known her forever
    Instead of just a year
    I'll love you forever
    I'll hate you only for a moment
    No matter what our friendship will stay true




    Submitted on 2006-06-26 10:59:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem....it makes me think of the best friends that i have had, only though im 16 i can relate and i think that this is a pretty cool poem.
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by ifonly_ihadyou | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. But I have some suggestions that, I believe, could improve this considerably.

    One day my life took a sudden turn
    I met her and I'd never be the same
    Now we're inseperable
    Dreading everytime we part
    And loving everytime we meet
    Our bond has exceded that of friends
    And now, it seems like we're sisters...
    Like the year I've known her
    Has been much like my entire life
    I'll hate you only for a moment
    No matter what, our friendship will never die


    I hope you like the changes I made here. If not , then not pressure to change this. You captured the sensative topic of friendship. I could only wish to say that I had some one like you do. Short and well-put


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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