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    dots Submission Name: Living On Visual Expressionsdots
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    Author: SmoothePapa
    ASL Info:    24/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55/90/16
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLiving On Visual Expressionsdots
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    Lets take a little walk,
    Let me hold you by your hand.
    Kiss you on the lips,
    to let you know I'm your man.
    Let me hold you and caress you,
    Let me hear your deepest thoughts.
    You can tell me anything tonight
    I'll listen, go ahead and talk.
    Let me treat you like the queen you are,
    and give you a bubble bath.
    Clean you gently while being friendly
    is a deal that's not so bad.
    Let me dry you with my towel
    then get your clothes so you can dress.
    Let me massage your every muscle
    to relieve you of your stress.
    Let me tell you what love really means,
    and the actions I've just shown.
    Ive heard the saying love is a feeling,
    but that statement's overblown.
    Let's make it known
    that love is an expression
    A.K.A. super verb;
    for those of you who depend on feelings
    excuse me, aren't feelings heard.
    You see I've learned
    that love expresses how it feel about someone.
    What's a feeling, if it's not revealing
    that you are number one.
    So here's my point love, L.O.V.E.
    stands for four simple words.
    Love's definition Living On Visual Expressions
    is a lesson you aint heard.
    #1. Your man says he loves you
    #2. He cheats again
    #3. The quality time for you he spends with his friends.
    #4. You stay with him despite the things that he has done
    #5. There's someone else for you if you'd let him have his turn.
    #6. You're afraid to leave because of the time you have put in.
    #7. What's the use of adding more when you get hurt in the end.
    #8. Just take some time to think, and listen to what I'm saying.
    #9. You should know by now that it's not love that he's displaying
    So what's ten there is no ten one through nine you should take in.
    I hope this lesson was a blessing a second lesson we'll see my friends.




    Submitted on 2006-06-26 13:05:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I really like this pice. It was verry well written and it did have a good lesson. This is going on my fav.s list. Great write. Keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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