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Author: SmoothePapa
ASL Info:    24/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 55 /90 /16
Words: 167
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Give me the keys to your heart,
and let me drive to your affection.
I'll provide you with security, love and protection.
Don't worry about the future
because the future is unknown.
But in words yes I clearly say
to you my heart belongs.
So lets go and be together
and the rest will fall in place.
I'm generous and loving
this is true just have a taste.
If you're skeptical and thinking
am I real or am I fake.
You can start your observation
look into my eyes face to face.
I'm sweeter than a cake
stronger than an army base
If you trust me with your feelings
you'll find out that I'm your mate.
On your conditions, your precision,
on your terms it's all ok.
No resistance, just persistance on my part is that ok.
So please girl don't make me wait
only time is in our way.
Just try me, you want be sorry,
and the keys...we'll they'll be safe.

Submitted on 2006-06-26 14:07:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is the sweetest thing I've ever read. More men should write like you, this would completely win me over. It was gentle, touching, just a quiet soothing melody...
| Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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