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    dots Submission Name: My Scarsdots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 1149
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1420



    Description:
       This isn't a good pice I know but it came to me after reading a letter from a friend. I know it doesn't flow well but I think of it as more of a short story written in the format of poetry. Anyway please tell me what you think.


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    dotsMy Scarsdots
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    A girl sat writing in the back of class,
    her scared arm moving stedily.
    A boy leaned over ,
    gestered to her arm,
    "What''s all that from?"
    She looked up with distant eyes,
    then back to the floor.

    "Each cut tells a story,
    the deepest, the saddest,
    set back, I'll let them tell their tell,
    of sad times and pain.

    This is for the times
    my mother was pissed.
    I can still hear her words.
    This one has many brothers.

    This is for the times
    he sounded like her.
    The days my sweatheart
    was maddest of all.

    This is for the times
    I hurt those I'm closest to
    Even if I ment no harm.

    This is for the times
    I hurt someone I loved
    who used to be more than a friend
    It should have been deeper. "

    She looked into his eyes,
    " to be short
    they're the saddest parts of my life
    an addiction founded by depression."

    "It you had only given it time,
    you would have been fine.
    And without those scars."
    He told her surly.

    "Time heals all wounds,
    but they always leave a scar.
    Yours aren't visible,
    mine are."






    Submitted on 2006-06-26 14:50:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i loved this one....its just wow i mean i love how u said ""Each cut tells a story,the deepest, the saddest,set back, I'll let them tell their tell,of sad times and pain. " and then i love how u said "She looked into his eyes," to be short they're the saddest parts of my life
    an addiction founded by depression."
    i loved it im going to add this to my fav list i hope to read more of your poems in the future damn i really love this piece good job love.

    all the love
    nikki

    *kisses*

    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      "This isn't a good piece"???? Are you crazy? Its wonderful. Don't be preposterous!!!

    Okay. Sorry for that outburst.

    I love everything about this.
    Yeah, it's more like a story, but poems are stories.
    And it's poetic and very nicely written.

    Very creative.
    I've read a lot of stuff about self-mutilation, and most of them sound the same. Except this.
    I love it.

    Very nicely done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      OMFG I LOVE THIS POEM..LOVE IT!!!! i'm addin it to my favs..yesssss <3 m3g4n
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by 2xhatedxsoulx2 | [ Reply to This ]
      great write, so true. i completly relate...
    family and relationship problems suck, and effect us forever.
    some of us find a way out, a way that leaves scars.
    i love the response the guy has to your explination, proving that people wont understand if they havent gone through it themselves.
    anyway, good job. keep writing.

    Kate
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by emochick13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was writen very well. And the flow was good. It did seem like a short story and it reminded me of a time when I was in school, and something similar to this happened. I like the last stanza the most, it just hit me. If you don't mind I would like to put it as my quote. I won't do it till I hear back from you. Again great write. I'm going to add it to my favourites. Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading.

    Always,
    Rae L.
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good. Some people want to forget any sadness that happened to them, others would rather remember. This piece is really powerfull, and it flows well. Great job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by xana | [ Reply to This ]
      Great wright I loved it, expecialy the ending. This was one of the reasons I actualy started wrighing. Love you always,
    David
    | Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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