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    dots Submission Name: ** Gonedots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dots** Gonedots
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    Why are you leaving me
    Lost in this place
    Nowhere to escape
    But in your warm embrace.

    But now your gone,
    And I have no shelter
    From the rolling waves of life
    Or the distant bomber plane.

    Will you return,
    So my stomach can dance in a native circle
    So I will have a shelter
    From this lonely place.




    Submitted on 2006-06-26 16:47:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this, it's very emotional. And once again you did a great job discribing the feelings, making it easier to understand the poem.

    Xana
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by xana | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not sure what you are saying in this write, but I am pretty sure that you are talking about some one you love going of to fight a war. If so, then i really liked this. You made it very powerful with the help of vivid imagery and description. If not, then I'm sorry. I'm kind of in a daze right now. Please let me know and I'll check it out and comment again.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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