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    dots Submission Name: Vampiredots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsVampiredots
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    Iron spikes of the crushing mace.
    My mind drifting out of space.
    Sucking my life like a black hearted Vampire.
    Contently drinking on my lifeís pacifier.
    Love is your fanged tool.
    Seducing the night you are my secret ghoul.
    Tempting prey with forsaken cunt.
    All their pain you truly hunt.
    All of my soul you consume.
    Leaving behind hints of your perfume.
    Standing there naked I am your paradigm.
    She took everything from me in a nightís time.
    She offered to me a sacred kiss.
    Leaving me with my heartís abyss.
    "How does my love taste?"
    I ask as she wipes it from her face.
    Oh, the hurtful pain.
    She filters all I have from every vein.
    She continues to defile me under the moonlight.
    And I just pray through my window breaks the day light.




    Submitted on 2004-01-25 01:28:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I thought this was going to be on a vampire? I guess in a way it was? I like your style of writing Soulraven. It brings life into a lifeless world. I will most deffently read more of your work. Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting metaphor! Creative.
    | Posted on 2004-01-25 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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