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    dots Submission Name: Mystery Medots
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    Author: Rodwen
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       Part of the dream I had.


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    dotsMystery Medots
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    Mystery Me
    6.26.2006
    By Rodwen Fëfalas

    Citizen’s arrest
    Locked in the car
    To run into the police department
    And beg for help.

    The nerves, something to calm me down
    Race to the shelves
    Push past it
    Confusion
    I should never have left them
    In the back seat.

    Mom and dad, I led them
    Parked beside me
    No one came
    Until it was too late.
    The car, crushed
    Everyone dead
    They’d escaped.

    Blind fury was the thing I fought
    They mocked me, using notes
    Curse them.
    A husband and wife.

    Pink pen crossed out grades and wrote zeroes,
    Laughs.
    Two pieces of hemp with neon green writing
    The lady’s information, picture, and a quote with “victory” written
    My mother, my mother, my mother of the motherless.
    Mom: dead; adopted parent: the killer.




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