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    dots Submission Name: ** Clogged Updots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 792
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 275



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    dots** Clogged Updots
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    I'm clogged up inside
    Can't shed a tear
    But I need to show you
    What I feel inside
    About her
    About you
    About Me
    About we
    But I don't know
    How to show you
    When I'm clogged up like this.




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 10:41:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's like... like.... a shaken bottle of apple cider!!! (no, i'm just kiddin!) Anyways, i think it's a good poem.... *mumbles* better than mine at least......
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by lost_alone64 | [ Reply to This ]
      i thinks this poem is short, and almost gets to the point, u mgiht need a little more detail to it, but wat do i know about poetry;) ne way its a good pome i liked it

    -nick-
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]


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