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    dots Submission Name: My Own Personal Hole in the Grounddots

    Author: alias13
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1/0/1
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This poem is a self-metaphor. It began as a description of my mood when I started writing it, but then I chose a difficult rhyme scheme for it, and the poem itself became the hole in the ground. It took a full week to finish.

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    dotsMy Own Personal Hole in the Grounddots

    I sit in a pit
    Of a merciless black
    There’s no way to go
    Either forward or back.

    I shout, ‘Let me out!’
    As the people walk by
    But the wall is too tall
    For my pitiful cry.

    I sink in a drink
    Of a black murky hue
    I’ll drown underground
    In this unholy goo.

    I need to be freed
    From my prison of muck
    But tis true, sure as glue,
    I am thoroughly stuck.

    You now ask me how
    I got into this place?
    With flies in my eyes
    And mud on my face?

    Please, let me ease
    Your curious mind
    I created my state
    With a shovel, you’ll find.

    Submitted on 2006-06-27 11:59:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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