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    Author: Rain
    ASL Info:    22/F/Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 531/514/70
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Coming,
    Going,
    Disappear.

    People tell you
    they will forever be with you.
    In your heart and likewise in theirs.

    Light,
    Dark,
    Bleakness.

    We will meet again,
    When we assend to Heaven.
    Yeah right, Hell is my domain.

    White,
    Black,
    Transparent.

    The innocence is taken,
    by the cruelty of the world,
    the misery that people endure.

    Into our corners we go.
    Hiding from all.
    Seeing, we do not.




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 13:48:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is quite good! Kind of has that vibe of the non believing in the "big talkers". I know the write didnt have a rhyme foundation to it, but I read the last line as, Seeing, we do not know.

    I enjoyed this one Kimbre. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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