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    dots Submission Name: * The Other Girldots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 758
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dots* The Other Girldots
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    That was the time
    If only I could go back to then
    I hope it's not a crime
    To wish it could have been lengthened

    When everything was perfect
    He was there
    And there was nothing to regret
    Except for that one tear
    In the relationship that is
    That one thing that kept him from me
    It was the other Miss

    It happened one night
    When I was away on business
    He was holding her tight
    It was because of her openness
    That he fell in love with her
    Leaving me in the dust
    Of what we were
    And all he had for her was lust

    It doesn't make sense
    How everything could go wrong
    And at my expense
    But I'm going to be strong
    I'm not giving up
    Not giving up on love




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 13:59:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think that this poem showed character and pretty much made the reader understand it, how the guy fell in love with another girl, i just want to say good poem

    -nick-
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
      :D good work kiddo. people who cheat on their partners should be burned at the stake. but yeah, good poem, keep it up :D

    angela
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by m with two i_s | [ Reply to This ]


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