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    dots Submission Name: Rest In Piecesdots
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    Author: deafeningsilenc
    ASL Info:    18/Male/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 31/18/35
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 699
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This is dedicated to my 'friends'. You know who you are.


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    dotsRest In Piecesdots
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    You, Judas Iscariots, betrayers!
    Utterers of untruths, false promises!
    Watching, masturbating – you vile voyeurs!

    A vow of loyalty, friendship – abhored,
    A distant tempest mildly menaces,
    My love, trust shown; betrayal my reward.

    You languidly lacerate me. Sadists!
    A scar will ne’er form – I am cut too deep.
    I hope this pierces your souls. Don’t weep!

    Revenge, eighth deadly, satisfying sin,
    Most succulent dish – deserving savour.
    The heart or soul, on which should I begin?

    How and when I exact it, that depends,
    Rest in pieces, fiendish, fair-weather friends.




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 14:05:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really cool poem. I know what it's like to have friends that aren't that great. It's hard. It bites to know that you can't trust everybody. Anyways . . . . . this poem had a lot of description to it, and it was very well written. Good job.

    ~ GothamFreak ~
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]


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