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    dots Submission Name: AFTERMATH (RIDING)dots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    Such a nice feeling:
    Stroking your hair-
    Just sympathy,
    Or do I really care?

    Such a warm feeling:
    My holding you-
    Wanna be told
    That you'd like to hold me too…

    Such a sad feeling:
    Another man's girl,
    Another man's world-
    Do you ever think of me?

    Delicious sad feeling:
    So must I now
    Disguise my song?
    And is feeling this so wrong?




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 15:40:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh man! Some poems set a target through words...some through emotion. This one happens to be a member of both groups!

    Not much I can really say except...yup...I understand this sweet temptation all to well myeself. But can honestly say...its never gotten the better part of me...whew!

    Fu*ckin awesome write.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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