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    dots Submission Name: flowing dreamsdots

    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1062
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsflowing dreamsdots

    sitting with a pen in hand/
    paper on lap/
    listning to music/
    then my foot starts to tap./
    getting into the rhythem/
    head starts to pop/
    humming in sync/
    now words start to drop./
    my body is joining in/
    with the flow of the rift/
    forget what im writting/
    as my mind starts to drift./
    singing to myself/
    no one else is listning/
    thoughts running wild/
    my dreams feel distant./
    the words are my own/
    my voice is on top/
    people walk past/
    but my voice doesnt drop./
    im now lost in my own little world/
    a girl with a dream/
    got my soul down on paper/
    words now flowing in streams.

    Submitted on 2006-06-27 16:16:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is really cool. i could definitely picture a girl at a coffee shop with a laptop and a notebook trying to get inspired. this is a write about inspiration if anything else. it's going on my fave list.
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it alot, I can see you sitting there with pen in hand. I can almost hear the music too.
    I like the flow. 4th line from the bottom drop the word *now* & I thnik it will be a great poem.
    keep'em comming. The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it a lot, it's you and you can tell that you wrote it ... keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      This one makes me giggle because when it said
    'humming in sync'
    I though it said 'humming Nsync'
    but ya its a really good one. I like it because thats kinda how I am when I write. good job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by tokillthedead | [ Reply to This ]

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