I can run,
I can hide,
I can hold it all inside,
But in the end it all returns,
And for freedom my heart yearns
Death and life hang in a balance,
Love and lust as well,
I just wish I had understood this,
That day I fell
I have left and I have returned,
Many a forgotten time,
I've given up and then fought hard again,
Against my own crime
I can't beat sin,
I can't fight myself,
It degrades all my health,
But the thing I will remember when I am lost,
Is to look back to the cross
And say 'I am free'
| I just wish I hand understood this|
I degrades all my health
[I degrades=I`ve degraded]
Don't you "hmm..." me, Bozich. Something's up.... [cough Katy cough]. Or isn't it? I dunno- I like how this whole poem is kind of summed up by the cross at the end, but it seems like you added that last line because you didn't want to seem like you were depressed. But one can take one look at your journal write, then look straight at this, and read between the lines.
...Arg. Just tell me what's up, okay? I might be one of her best friends, but I count you pretty high up there on MY friends list. I hope you do the same.
- T o x i c R o s e
|| Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Toxic Rose | [ Reply to This ] || it was a good writing as far as wording, emotion, imagry, all that good stuff but on a personal level I am not all that religious...not to say I have anything against anyone who believes in god or even the concept of god, i Just dont' get that on a personal level but overall good write, even if I didn't get into the point behind it too much it was still pretty well written, will check out some more of your stuff,|
|| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ] || This is real good|
I liked how you showed that with a personal relationship with God nothing can ever keep you down for too long
Very Nice Job with this!!!!
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
|| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] || Very insightful and inspring write. Such a pleasure to read!|
That third line in the last stanza...did you mean to say It instead of I? Just wondering.
Other than that, this poem has no flaws in my book...unless you wanna consider "the truth" as being a flaw...and if so...then this poem is full of flaws. Chock full of them, ya know?
|| Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ] |