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Author: shambolic
ASL Info:    19.Female.Mozchester
Elite Ratio:    1.92 - 10 /11 /15
Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just a random spewage. It looks like I'm trying hard to be unconventional but this is just what fell out of my head!!!


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factual pretension
is not a dream
twisted cans
wooden person
ality
sieved peas, shelled
sugar.
factual intention
is not dream
its a choice of
mind a piece of
cake.

fictional mention
lengthen rhymes
and break
in time
with the beat
and the drum
and the howl
and the dream
not a dream

take the piece of
cake and stuff it up
your mind in the choice
of dream twisted wooden
ality
Person pretension factual

Intention




Submitted on 2006-06-27 17:32:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was an awesome poem. I like it . . . . and no . . . . . . it was not spewage. Hahaha. Well anyways . . . . I thought it was pretty cool. Great job.

~ GothamFreak
| Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]


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