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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       bigs ups to gnarles barkley...I stole a couple things from him in this but It'll be ight


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    in the place where words are meaningless/
    I"m crazy, to you, but here I"m a genius/
    I"m not in control, but I"m ready to die/
    have I mentioned I"m crazy, and that I"m ready to fly/
    my consciousness was lost right around the time/
    when I could sniff up a dime/
    I was on the line/
    but once I clean my mirror I"ll be feelin fine/




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 20:14:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its good man u always write good thing good job troy
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      On the line... I get it. Uh I like that you made a pun and were clever in that, but really... Doing drugs is not all it is cracked up to be don't you think? Hugs not drugs....
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha... This was great. I really liked the part about flyin. I have always wanted to fly and I almost did once. Remember me tellin you bout that time me and Meg got drunk off our a*ses and I decided to jump off my railing. N-E-ways this was really good and I will see ya later.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      "I"m not in control, but I"m ready to die/
    have I mentioned I"m crazy, and that I"m ready to fly/"

    I love that.

    The whole thing is wonderful. Great ending too, about the mirror. Good stuffs.

    Your river of talent just never stops flowing, does it?
    (lol Like my metaphor?)

    Sorry this comment sucks, but I have spyware and there are pop-ups are everywhere!!!

    Byeeee

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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