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    dots Submission Name: Horizondots
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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1022
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 551



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    dotsHorizondots
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    On the brink of a new horizon
    Why does the past creep in?
    All the shadows of a different world
    Threaten the pale blue sky
    The distorted green of jealousy
    The lapses of insanity
    The hurtful lies of love
    Now the dawn has awoken
    Risen with a second chance
    Inside a broken heart
    The memories will not cease
    I wonder what will ease the pain
    Let me forgive and forget
    I was the one who said
    Id rather a broken heart
    Than to live within regret




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 21:40:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is so beautiful, it's so well written, and I love the message. I read it twice to really understand it, but I loved the fact that the meaning of the poem was "disguised" with the horizon, the dawn...So beautiful!!! I love when poems have different meanings, and I think this one does. I don't know if I'm right but I understood that when we are heartbroken and we want to start over again, it's hard to forget the past and all the pain we're leaving behind. But in the end, it's better to let go, forget and forgive everything, it's better to take risks to find love. I wouldn't change anything about this poem. It's already beautiful.

    XoXo
    Gaby

    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Lost_Delirious | [ Reply to This ]


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