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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    When the stars dampened
    And tears descended from your eyes
    I felt you breaking down
    And walking towards the flames
    There was no one there beside you
    As you held your broken heart
    I sensed your sacred loneliness
    And hung my head in shame…




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 21:43:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Repentance..
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems as though ....the author left someone , broke someone's heart...if the author has , then it is a very painful experience for anyone whose heart has been broken...


    But the fact is ... "what goes around , comes around"...no one can escape being hurt...

    it all comes back one day...

    Atleast the Author repents having broken someone's heart...

    Repentaence is good...
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]


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